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Post by Elijah Krum on Wed Jul 17, 2013 12:04 pm

We're nearly there - just need a few more tweaks.

Habits and Quirks - I'd give her a quirk and tweak the habit. There's no way she could keep that up without it killing her.

Personality - You need to make her a bit more rounded. She is coming off as very, very childish at the moment and she needs some redeeming factors about her.

RP Sample: We roleplay in past-tense third person prose here on PA. Your sample needs to reflect your ability to be able to do that.

Just those few bits - other than that, looking good!

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Post by Alaska Waters on Wed Jul 17, 2013 1:22 pm

Okay - will do.
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Post by Elijah Krum on Wed Jul 17, 2013 1:54 pm

Let me know when you're done. Smile

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Post by Khaat Lupin on Sun Jul 21, 2013 4:52 pm

Alaska,

We allow 2 weeks for every application. Please let us know how we can help you finish her!

Thanks!
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Post by Khaat Lupin on Sun Jul 28, 2013 3:27 pm

Alaska,

I can only give you a few more days on this before I have to move this to storage until you can finish her.

Let us know how we can help!

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Post by Khaat Lupin on Fri Aug 02, 2013 12:38 am

moved to storage
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