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Post by Khaat Lupin Sun Jun 10, 2012 3:01 am

no, no. read the app carefully. you have some feminine references in there that you need to shape up. i'm okay with the change, but i do need the app to fit. i realize the changes are small but it might cause some rough patches with the character as he plays out.
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Post by Jesse Lynn Mon Jun 11, 2012 2:29 pm

do you mind telling what exactly seems feminine? I'm not sure exactly what you mean, i rechecked the app, and changed a few things, otherwise, im not sure what you mean exactly
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Post by Elijah Krum Mon Jun 11, 2012 7:47 pm

You have references to Jesse being a 'she' or a 'her', that's what Khaat is saying.

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Post by Khaat Lupin Mon Jun 11, 2012 10:55 pm

Please correct references that were written when jesse was a female. for example. "she has a figure that is skinny yet curvy...." etc, etc. I am not good with that. Those sorts of references need to be either changed or more thought out because feminine references to a male character, and vice versa will have a strong impact upon the personality of the character. You have not created him to be feminine. And, yes, the she's and her's do need to be he's and his. I'm not trying to be overly finicky. But I do need him to be a bit more consistent in his gender design.
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Post by Jesse Lynn Tue Jun 12, 2012 12:00 am

okay, i think i got everything changed. does it look good now?
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Post by Khaat Lupin Tue Jun 12, 2012 12:41 am

yes! looks great now! nice job. thanks.
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