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on Fri Feb 19, 2010 9:53 pm
O U T O F C H A R A C T E R
Name: Emily
Gender: girl
Age:15
How you found Potter's Army:
Any other characters on Potter's Army: this is my 4th
Have your read the Plot?: yes
Have your read the Must read threads?: yes

B A S I C I N F O R M A T I O N
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Name: Even Bruin
Gender: guy
Race: human
Blood Status: half blood
Year AND Age: drop out 16
Preferred houses: drop out
Canon or Original: original
Play-by: Oliver Sykes

A P E A R A N C E
Height: tallish skinny
Hair: Black longer
Eye color: Brown
Skin: white
General Appearance: Even has Brown eyes and long black hair. He has multiple tattoos with he uses to express himself. Like his name he looks and is unusual. Not only is he gay but he looks it. He looks as confident as he is and doesnít let what people say about his looks get him down. (55 words))

P E R S O N AN L I T Y
Skills: singing. Flying defense against the dark arts
Weaknesses: hot guys, school positions
Likes: guys flying singing
Dislikes: mean people school and positions
Motto: Iím losing my F*** Mind
General Personality: even is easily annoyed by people. When he sees a hot guy he canít help but want to be with him he sings what he believes in and fallows his heart (which isnít always reliable) heíll always be there to help the ones in need. Even Loves hanging out with his friends and going out on Friday nights when he doesnít have a sensor of something to sing for. He laughs every time the muggles make a rumor of him going back to rehab when he had never gone before and had never done drugs. They made him look like this bad guy that mothers didnít like and fathers wanted to kill but even was completely the opposite. Loving his life when he wasnít surrounded by the war (128words)

H I S T O R Y
Family Information: all His father a muggle was in a car crash and die leveing evens mom to kill herself and even in an emotional state.
Childhood: Evens parents had left him in a very emotional state. He didnít really have any friends and he never went out cutting himself. And moping about, He dropped out of school because he was a lot like hermine and vary smart. He new almost evry thing they would teach him in the next two years in Hogwarts. His parentís death is what made him and emo. Singer. (68 words)
Hogwarts: Even went to Hogwarts until his 6th year then dropped out to work in the muggle world singing. he wanted to get away from the magicl world and make a successful carrer in the muggle world. With out The war between Voldamort and everyone who was not on his side. Eve wanted nothing more than to forget about what magic was in his blood he just wanted to be alone with his music everyone always wanting to be his friend and living with them wafting them to wonder when the next time he would go to rehab again. (101 words)
Adulthood: not graduated

Short Role-play: (Whatever your normal role-play length is, don't do it extra-long or extra-short especially for this application. You can skip this if it's not your first character.) not my first character


okay its been redone 4 times and all the paragrahs are over 50 words


Last edited by Even Burbin on Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:36 pm; edited 4 times in total

Even Burbin Empty Re: Even Burbin

on Fri Feb 19, 2010 10:06 pm
You need to write more for general personalitty, childhood and hogwarts..
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Even Burbin Empty Re: Even Burbin

on Fri Feb 19, 2010 10:08 pm
umm according to the rules and the app tamplet they only need to be a paragraph with would be 50 words but i guess ill add more any way

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on Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:03 pm
Emily, all of the history in here is copied pretty much word for word from your other character Edward Collins. Please can you make all of your character unique!

Also, no more drop outs after this please, three should be fine Smile.
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on Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:07 pm
okay jemma but seeing as i don't like parents or school none of my characters will be in school or have parents.

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on Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:18 pm
That isn't the problem. It's that you copy-pasted it word for word. It needs to be different. Also, if their parents have died, that is going to really affect someone. Like if your parents were killed, it would change you as a person. So that needs to be included.

Basically what I meant was re-write it so that it's different, as making the same character again and again is pointless. The childhood was the main problem. Also maybe expand on how Even has no family affects him now?

Also can you add bold tags around 'Name:' etc. ([b*]Name:[/b*] without the *s), please!
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on Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:41 pm
and i didn't copy and paste i had edwards app saved on microsoft word

Even Burbin Empty Re: Even Burbin

on Sat Feb 20, 2010 2:53 pm
ACCEPTED and sorted into DROP-OUTS.

I'm accepting it, yay! Thanks for the edits though, really appreciated. Remember I said no more drop outs after this. I'm honestly surprised that you don't find it boring only having people out of school, but that's your choice.
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